Adam Kushtov, 17 years old, hostage taker...

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blizzak 2005-10-12 19:08	Adam Kushtov, 17 years old, hostage taker... The writings of Adam Kushtov – 17 years old and one of the hostage takers… August 31st Mairbek! Mairbek!!!!! Pack that bag quick and don’t forget the C4 We’ve seen war before and now we’re ready for more gore You got them blueprints of the gymnasium and the school? Check, and yea I also got the spools for the explosives, cool? Cleaned ak47, Ossetia will be free from the oppressors by noon Soon this country won’t be slaves under the Russian moon We’ll crush the fumes that those leaders of the west is breathing Feeding us with propaganda that our rebel forces are heathens We just want our freedom and we’ll walk through hells fire They oppress us with self admire and wire our homes in silence This here will be the statement of our liberty towards our flag We won’t have Moscow deciding how our boarders are dragged Sjamil gave us this divine mission to free his enslaved people Free Chechnya! We will burn all the Russian made steeples So that we under one nation and one god all can be equals Tho meek shall inherit the earth this isn’t no sequel for the feeble September 1st Pack the Gaz-66 with mixtures of explosives, rage n spirit Semper-fi; "Mortui sunt ut liberi vivamus" plague our feelings They died for us to live free ; we are closer to the destination At a point of no return of an unbound and liberated nation We’ve been given the ratios of around 1400 individuals as goal But around two hours later we found our souls was sold We was trapped with too many hostages that weren’t too old the hostages were teachers, kids, janitors and other school staff I plead to let the kids go but the others in the crew laughed Fools had to get a look into the devils eyes to see what I saw 500 kids sitting crying with dropped jaws obeying our laws pause… The media are here, military and officials from the Russian state Vladimir grabbed the camera and recorded statements in hate He slapped the child and said give us our country back now Opened the cam and threw the tape out the window without doubts And the tape said: “we are the insurgents of the liberation army” “Beslan is ours and we will by any means liberate by harming “ A little later, maybe around 1400 hours they killed a teacher I said to do it under the bleachers to show we are no creatures But they hesitated and did it in front of all the scared children Making us look like some idiot terrorists and damn villains They demand to pillage, let no one escape their harm n message A note of freedom was put out to raise the alarming questions The corpse was wrapped n then dragged through the gym The blood trail after the corpse spelled the words cruel n grim September 2nd It was a cold morning and the fog was thick outside the complex The kids inside was hungry, scared n screaming out of context Yesterday we freed our demands and rigged the gym with C4 And then we sat everybody in a ring so that we could see more.. Getting better visuals of anybody making a move in this stench The facility was drenched in smells reeking like a trench Piss, shit and clotted blood please pardon I’m speaking French This was one forgotten place in one way reminding of another Negotiators was outside, ready to confide with my brothers After a small talk we released 40 people and let them flee Setting ‘em free after a promise to meet the Ingush president We set off two explosions as warnings for the outside residents Letting them know our presence so they could raise the questions "I know not with what weapons World War III will be fought, but World War IV will be fought with sticks and stones." ---Albert Einstein
blizzak 2005-10-12 19:08	September 3rd All right this here is my thoughts collected at this hour They neglected the power of a civil alliance without compliance This is something we made and we’re proud to break the silence We will forever be seen as vultures and devils of a sort If we survive this race for freedom our heads will be in court It’s all quiet and at the moment they corked the negotiation I feel something is about to happen we broke their patience We took lives to get to a point of navigation, a new road Independence was our gas and damn how the fuels flowed Negotiators talked us in to accept medics in to the building They would bring water and aid to credit all the children As they approached a gun peeked through the vest of man Arsen grabbed his rifle and shot through the chest the man Two other medics was wounded and died there on spot The others pulled back after their co-workers was shot Then there were two explosions and a part of the gym crumbled As this elapsed 30 hostages ran for their lives and stumbled We fired our guns without a thought to be humble They fired back and this war had reached a full blown scale Only god will prevail and the righteous ones can’t fail Vladimir screamed ALLAH AKBAR and pressed to ignite The lever was switched…and the rest became white… One fight, one plan and one mission…under the rubble I succumbed to the lord and so did three hundred others… "I know not with what weapons World War III will be fought, but World War IV will be fought with sticks and stones."<br> ---Albert Einstein <br>
Fredzon_mandela P41 2005-10-12 19:17	Grymt bra och gripande text. Big ups. hade helt glömt av denna händelse
Hörstedt Supporter 2005-10-12 19:25	Dopeness mayne... Förtjänar mer läsningar. Lägg på ughh också!
blizzak 2005-10-12 19:35	ah glömde säga att denna e från en topic battle på en annan sida där topicen va att man skulle vara en av de som tar gisslan... "I know not with what weapons World War III will be fought, but World War IV will be fought with sticks and stones."<br> ---Albert Einstein <br>
MickMästarn P38 2005-10-13 03:10	Så jävulskt bra ..vilken känsla. längtar till skivan STICK YOUR DISCO UP YER ARSE!
styGGE P36 2005-10-13 17:20	Riktig riktigt bra text. Svårt att beskriva allt helvete som har hänt där, men det gjorde du riktigt bra i denna text, gripande. Svårt att ta ut några speciella rader, eftersom dom alla låg på sån hög nivå, men gillade: The corpse was wrapped n then dragged through the gym The blood trail after the corpse spelled the words cruel n grim The media are here, military and officials from the Russian state Vladimir grabbed the camera and recorded statements in hate This here will be the statement of our liberty towards our flag We won’t have Moscow deciding how our boarders are dragged På vilken sida finns denna topic battle på? "I'll get the mexicans to fuck up Xzibit again if he don't pimp my ride" - Celph Titled
blizzak 2005-10-14 23:04	lägger en OT på denna... "I know not with what weapons World War III will be fought, but World War IV will be fought with sticks and stones."<br> ---Albert Einstein <br>
Rhetoric P41 2005-10-14 23:13	snyggt gjort. riktigt fett (men några gramatikfel som vanligt :) Rhetoric 1. the art of speaking or writing effectively 2. skill in the effective use of speech
blizzak 2005-10-17 01:25	testar en uppning "I know not with what weapons World War III will be fought, but World War IV will be fought with sticks and stones."<br> ---Albert Einstein <br>
GAIA 2005-12-15 16:53	Feedback Mairbek! Mairbek!!!!! Pack that bag quick and don’t forget the C4 We’ve seen war before and now we’re ready for more gore You got them blueprints of the gymnasium and the school? Check, and yea I also got the spools for the explosives, cool? cool var sämre rim här, du har ju tools, fools och andra bra rim att köra på istället? Cleaned ak47, Ossetia will be free from the oppressors by noon Soon this country won’t be slaves under the Russian moon We’ll crush the fumes that those leaders of the west is breathing Feeding us with propaganda that our rebel forces are heathens Bra att du använer oppress och inte suppress som så många ofta gör. Du uttrycker dig inte så bra stundtals. Crush the fumes? Slaves under the russian moon? Metaforik är en sak men den ska bygga på något och inte vara påhittad. We just want our freedom and we’ll walk through hells fire They oppress us with self admire and wire our homes in silence This here will be the statement of our liberty towards our flag We won’t have Moscow deciding how our boarders are dragged Dragging borders? Du menar inte drawing borders? Den fetstilade raden var inte bra alls, tänk på vad den raden egentligen betyder översatt och säg mig om den inte känns lite krystad? Sjamil gave us this divine mission to free his enslaved people Free Chechnya! We will burn all the Russian made steeples So that we under one nation and one god all can be equals Tho meek shall inherit the earth this isn’t no sequel for the feeble Bra rader, prova byt ut isn't mot ain't, det flyter bättre i mina öron. Pack the Gaz-66 with mixtures of explosives, rage n spirit Semper-fi; "Mortui sunt ut liberi vivamus" plague our feelings They died for us to live free ; we are closer to the destination At a point of no return of an unbound and liberated nation Don't overdo it Blizz, de två översta raderna är talande för det... We’ve been given the ratios of around 1400 individuals as goal But around two hours later we found our souls was sold We was trapped with too many hostages that weren’t too old the hostages were teachers, kids, janitors and other school staff I plead to let the kids go but the others in the crew laughed that our souls were sold? as goal? På ngt sätt känns inte Chapelle slang så viktigt eller passande just i en text som denna. We was trapped??? :) Fools had to get a look into the devils eyes to see what I saw 500 kids sitting crying with dropped jaws obeying our laws pause... The media are here, military and officials from the Russian state Vladimir grabbed the camera and recorded statements in hate He slapped the child and said give us our country back now Opened the cam and threw the tape out the window without doubts Försök tänka på att banta ned raderna lite, de är i längsta laget och du broderar ofta ut betydelserna. Försök skriva lite mer ekonomiskt. And the tape said: “we are the insurgents of the liberation army” “Beslan is ours and we will by any means liberate by harming “ Andra raden fungerar inte riktigt, blir lite krock där, du säger att "Vi kommer att befria Beslan med alla medel genom att skada (er)". Du ser nog själv ganska enkelt vad jag menar inte fungerar. A little later, maybe around 1400 hours they killed a teacher I said to do it under the bleachers to show we are no creatures But they hesitated and did it in front of all the scared children Making us look like some idiot terrorists and damn villains Du blandar ofta imperfekt med perfekt, försök ha bättre koll på dem. Making borde vara made här t.ex. They demand to pillage, let no one escape their harm n message A note of freedom was put out to raise the alarming questions The corpse was wrapped n then dragged through the gym The blood trail after the corpse spelled the words cruel n grim Pillage i en gympasal? Vad finns att plundra/stjäla där? Cruel n grim kändes lite inordnat och halvt billiga rim faktiskt. forts.
GAIA 2005-12-15 16:53	It was a cold morning and the fog was thick outside the complex The kids inside was hungry, scared n screaming out of context Yesterday we freed our demands and rigged the gym with C4 And then we sat everybody in a ring so that we could see more.. See more what? :) Getting better visuals of anybody making a move in this stench The facility was drenched in smells reeking like a trench Piss, shit and clotted blood please pardon I’m speaking French This was one forgotten place in one way reminding of another Negotiators was outside, ready to confide with my brothers Frenchrimmet kunde du asbsolut ha skippat helt, känns bara fel i förhållande till textens tema. After a small talk we released 40 people and let them flee Setting ‘em free after a promise to meet the Ingush president We set off two explosions as warnings for the outside residents Letting them know our presence so they could raise the questions Bra rader. Tänk på rimschemat bara så du ligger på takterna. Flee gör inte riktigt det och du följer inte upp med någon slags parametrik heller så det hackar lite där. All right this here is my thoughts collected at this hour They neglected the power of a civil alliance without compliance This is something we made and we’re proud to break the silence We will forever be seen as vultures and devils of a sort If we survive this race for freedom our heads will be in court Återigen springer du iväg från ditt rimschema. It’s all quiet and at the moment they corked the negotiation I feel something is about to happen we broke their patience We took lives to get to a point of navigation, a new road Independence was our gas and damn how the fuels flowed Negotiators talked us in to accept medics in to the building They would bring water and aid to credit all the children Rätt nice, credit känns dock malplacerat. Patience/negotiation fungerar väl sådär. As they approached a gun peeked through the vest of man Arsen grabbed his rifle and shot through the chest the man Two other medics was wounded and died there on spot The others pulled back after their co-workers was shot Then there were two explosions and a part of the gym crumbled As this elapsed 30 hostages ran for their lives and stumbled We fired our guns without a thought to be humble Hmm, säkert bara slarv på de två översta raderna så jag lämnar dem. Att gå från 2 bars till 3 och sen tillbaka till 2 t.ex. fungerar inte alltid så bra. Det fuckar upp flowet då en läsare/lysnare förväntar sig ett rill rim efter 3'an. Humble kändes lite krystat, vi snackar liksom om terrorister? Den raden kunde skippats helt eller gjorts om. They fired back and this war had reached a full blown scale Only god will prevail and the righteous ones can’t fail Vladimir screamed ALLAH AKBAR and pressed to ignite The lever was switched…and the rest became white… One fight, one plan and one mission…under the rubble I succumbed to the lord and so did three hundred others… Bra slutrader! Om du bara hållt det lika koncist och linjärt i resten av texten hade den varit mkt bättre. Summa Summarum Överlag är raderna är lite väl långa. Såg också ett och annat grammatiskt fel men inget värt att poängtera. Helheten är för lång och du upprepar dig, ofta säger flera rader samma saker. Korta ned texten, försök att inte fokusera för mycket på att det ska rimma flera gånger per bar, lägg mer tid på rimmen som sådana istället. Det är ändå en bra text men med lite förbättringar kan den bli great. Ett plus för en del on-point rader som kändes relevanta till ämnet. //Peace

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