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Life as a seed

Vår Hiphop - Lyricism

   

2004-11-14 01:25

Life as a seed

When I was a kid, beginnin to grow up/
I never felt invalid but now im lack of luck/
heard hiphop, two pac, notorious B.I.G and J5/
throught their glorious words I could survive/
it could accure to me as a very good advice/
rollin the dice and wish for the sixth side/
cuz I couldnt decide what to do for myself/
schoolbooks on the shelf, why I couldnt tell/
my mind was just spinnin around in circles/
wishin for miracles in my hard knocked life/
makin mom cry, couldnt play the cards right/
sittin up all night tryin to figure out/
why I was the kid on the block with no dreams/
as it seemed my life had no theme, no esteem/
and it leaved me all out with scars in my soul/
so bizarre that I could loose all my control/

Inte alltför heta rim enligt mig själv, hmm, tjae, but a track doesnt have to be all about advancement and stuff. Skulle vilja ha konstruktiv kritik! Några bra rader?

We came from a distant land, our lives allready planned. We came in ships from across the sea, never again home we would see. And now we become american fruit, with african roots.

2004-11-14 16:15
Upp.
We came from a distant land, our lives allready planned. We came in ships from across the sea, never again home we would see. And now we become american fruit, with african roots.

2004-11-14 17:02
du har blivit bättre gällande rimmen,att du tar in rim i raderna också gör det roligare att läsa =) det e bra,men gör det ännu mera liskom..du kan ju engelska bra så till nästa gång,träna mer med att få rim ännu mera =) och mer att rimma på hela orden :D

fint "rimschema".. :

why I was the kid on the block with no dreams /
as it seemed my life had no theme , no esteem /

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en av de få gångerna jag faktiskt förstår mig på din hela text.. :p det va bra handling,känns som du kommer nå vart med den (: ska du fortsätta på den??

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jag e ivrig att spela in...so fix it! (;
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fortsätt skriva o sånt,jag gillar dina texter
bra emil! :D
här får du lite kärlek

2004-11-15 17:14
Tack tack Kepish! Kul att någon här på Whoa orkar kommentera! :)
We came from a distant land, our lives allready planned. We came in ships from across the sea, never again home we would see. And now we become american fruit, with african roots.

2004-11-15 17:33
såklart =) men svara på min fråga.. ? :p
här får du lite kärlek

2004-11-15 17:35
Ah, njae vet inte om jag ska fortsätta på den, hehe. . Får se om jag orkar =) Kolla min andra text jag lagt upp nu. =/
We came from a distant land, our lives allready planned. We came in ships from across the sea, never again home we would see. And now we become american fruit, with african roots.

2004-11-15 17:45
hehe ok.
här får du lite kärlek

2005-01-16 17:55
Kepish är tydligen en hip hop "don"...
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