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Komik- The most precious thing..

Vår Hiphop - Lyricism

   

2005-01-15 17:34

Komik- The most precious thing..

Simple words whispered, emptiness filled the emptiness-
I realised, your meaning behind your words was worth less-
Worthless, blinded by love I couldn’t see through you-
Eyes, windows of the soul, I want to see through you..

Walking alongside an unexplored pavement, lonely-
The distance is eternity of fake intensions that stoned me-
Pain, I desided to wear it for you, I found it suitable-
Decieved, by my own definition of something beautiful..

The rose that I gave you, you let it die and turn black-
My hands blooded by thorns of it, and I can’t just lie and turn back-
You promised me a light, so I wouldn’t get lost in the shadows-
Fuck cupid! My life is slippin’ away, dying becouse of his arrows!

Memories, is just chronicles of particals in life’s hour glass-
I drown in the quicksand of time, couse you made me live to fast-
And as I take my final breath and close my eyes, she just looks at me-
Leaves me with my destiny, and the most precious thing she took from me..


The End..

I'm Superman! King fucking Kong! I can pick you up and throw you a million miles. I'm number one. Number fucking one. I'm number one. Number fucking one. Number one! Number one! Number one!

2005-01-15 17:57
well, jag brukar faktiskt inte gilla såna här texter men den här var faktiskt väldigt bra! jag är inte heller särskilt bra på att ge kritik till såna här texter men jag gillade dom två sista mer än dom första.
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2005-01-16 16:22
bäst i texten:

Walking alongside an unexplored pavement, lonely-
The distance is eternity of fake intensions that stoned me-
Pain, I desided to wear it for you, I found it suitable-
Decieved, by my own definition of something beautiful..

Fint flyt på slutet:
And as I take my final breath and close my eyes, she just looks at me-
Leaves me with my destiny, and the most precious thing she took from me..

VG-
 

2005-01-16 16:35
Simple words whispered, emptiness filled the emptiness-
I realised, your meaning behind your words was worth less-
- bra början

And as I take my final breath and close my eyes, she just looks at me-
Leaves me with my destiny, and the most precious thing she took from me..
- bra slut

det emellan höll lite lägre klass men förutom vissa stavfel så var det fina fisken
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2005-01-17 18:15
Tack för kritiken allihop!

Mer kommentarer o´kritik tack!

upp!
I'm Superman! King fucking Kong! I can pick you up and throw you a million miles. I'm number one. Number fucking one. I'm number one. Number fucking one. Number one! Number one! Number one!

2005-01-17 18:54
man skulle kunna tycka att rimmen e för 'simpla' el. liknande när man först läser texten....men efter ett tag så fattar man att d inte behöver vara 300stavelser o en massa flerstavigt för att d ska behöva funka!

BRA!


du har lyckats få ijop en bra text utan att behöva krysta fram en massa skit...nice!

gillade personligtn slutet bäst:
And as I take my final breath and close my eyes, she just looks at me-
Leaves me with my destiny, and the most precious thing she took from me..


bra text...keep it frEsh! :p
Drick Mjölk! *Muuuuuuuu*!!!