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Father...pt.2

Vår Hiphop - Lyricism

   

2005-03-06 15:22

Father...pt.2

Det blir lite som det blir...men den kommer nog knytas ihop bättre senare...

But y'all remember the first one...


So tired of habits; he’s had it with maggots and such
Feet’s dragging these guts releasing the battery crush
Mad at the fuss, had it with tragedy he’s glad of the lusts
Seeing red, being blue and having the blackest of minds
It’s like sadness was literarily attached to his spine
Attached to the vines of life’s lustful Garden of Eden
Clinging on with hope for not fighting these heathens
Believing nothing when reading stuck not retrieving…
The thoughts of a great man, considered himself a looser
He had abusive thoughts since it happened but he…
Used it when rapping, spitted his share of beliefs
Oh Christ it’s just like mother Mary married a thief
Baring invariable errands of sharing the terror inside
Tearing his hive, smearing the glares to the life of a child
But we watched it with profanity, vanity stroked his chin
Noticed a calm outside but the Oceans stormed within
A formative normal kin born to win but lost the race
Lost his aides, the cost was paid for this unfortunate lost race
The last man standing ready to kneel in front of wheel…
Of fortune foretelling the terror and torture of being alive
Seen as a child but he was an incredible icon of divinity
He had hate in is blood it was stained without remedy
Enemies, plenty of entities plaguing this frail person
And who ever thought he’d end up in jail for searching …

"I know not with what weapons World War III will be fought, but World War IV will be fought with sticks and stones."
---Albert Einstein

2005-03-06 20:48
Förstår inte mycket av detta.... min engelska är för kass för det.

ger den ett upp ändå, för jag vet att du förtjänar kritik.
 

2005-03-07 01:20
Snygg helhet, en del vackra metaforer i den, det gillar jag skarpt.

gillade speciellt:

Seeing red, being blue and having the blackest of minds
It’s like sadness was literarily attached to his spine


Used it when rapping, spitted his share of beliefs
Oh Christ it’s just like mother Mary married a thief
Baring invariable errands of sharing the terror inside
Tearing his hive, smearing the glares to the life of a child
But we watched it with profanity, vanity stroked his chin
Noticed a calm outside but the Oceans stormed within
In the old days it was not a crime

2005-03-07 15:53
så ja...det kommer..
"I know not with what weapons World War III will be fought, but World War IV will be fought with sticks and stones."<br> ---Albert Einstein <br>

2005-03-08 01:01
ja...
"I know not with what weapons World War III will be fought, but World War IV will be fought with sticks and stones."<br> ---Albert Einstein <br>

2005-03-08 01:44
Great

+ Extremt flowable denna med. Mkt avvägt antal stavelser, nästan stundtals matematiskt perfekt i sin utformning.
+ Bra rim och rimschema, inget känns direkt konstlat eller plastigt.
+ Innehållsmässigt ställer du ännu högre krav på läsaren i denna än din förra och det är inte heller säkert att det är en bra sak nödvändigtvis. Metaforer är inte alltid lätta att utläsa ifall du inte har språket som de skrivs på som modermål men du kanske postar denna på andra ställen också? Iofs hade jag inga större problem att ta till mig den men kanske andra?

- Inget speciellt.

//Pz