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Where did things go wrong?

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2006-08-03 18:03

Where did things go wrong?

Om ni läser så kan ni väl lämna en kommentar också? Det skulle uppskattas.

She starts to think along the line, where did things
Go wrong in life?But it seems hard to find a response in mind
She used to have it all, but now she's got nothing left
She used to love life, but instead she's loving death
So it's while hoping he was there, choking on her tears
coping with her fears, realizing hopelessness is here, that she opens another beer....
All she does everyday is to drown her sorrows
Where yesterday is now, and now is tomorrow
She thirsts to cry but it even hurts to try
She's cursed inside, thinking that she deserves to die
she doesn't even have a single tissue that's dry
I wish she would try, but she's just living to die
She used to be full of life, now she's a walking carcus
Her future used to be bright, now she walks in darkness
She's exhausted, and won't put up the fight again
She's just gonna let time pass and wait for life to end

Always look on the bright side of life

2006-08-03 18:50
sorglig...
Okej skriven...
tog nån sekund innan man hitta nåt flyt i den men tillslut så..
Gillade en del rader men de kändes som om du upprepade samma lika ett par ggr...
men men overall Soft!
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2006-08-03 19:51
So it's while hoping he was there, choking on her tears
- Antagligen nått slarvfel men den här raden förstår jag mig inte på.

All she does everyday is to drown her sorrows
Where yesterday is now, and now is tomorrow
She thirsts to cry but it even hurts to try
She's cursed inside, thinking that she deserves to die

- Detta var nice!

she doesn't even have a single tissue that's dry
- Den här gillade jag inte alls, känns krystad på nått sätt.

Texten hade sinna ups and downs. Tycker inte du behärskar det engelska språket lika bra här som in dina andra engelska texter. Men det är inte dåligt, det är dina andra texter som är bättre.
"Tried to freeze time that's why I iced the face of my watch" - AZ

2006-08-04 14:43
Men det fortsätter, hela är;

So it's while hoping he was there, choking on her tears
coping with her fears, realizing hopelessness is here, that she opens another beer....


Det är medans hon hoppas som han är där, kvävs av sina tårar, tar itu med sina rädslor, inser att hopplösheten är här, som hon öppnar en till öl.

Inget fel i språket där...

Men tack för kritiken!
Always look on the bright side of life

2006-08-04 17:51
Sarcasm
Of course! Får skylla på tröttheten :)
"Tried to freeze time that's why I iced the face of my watch" - AZ

2006-08-04 18:17
hehe, it happens ;)
Always look on the bright side of life

2006-08-04 19:30
bra

2006-08-04 20:31
fåordig...men tack.
Always look on the bright side of life

2006-08-04 20:34
ja gillar inte kommentera engelska:P
men den var bra tycker ja!

She starts to think along the line, where did things
Go wrong in life?But it seems hard to find a response in mind


dessa öppningsrader va feta

2006-08-04 23:53
tack så mycket
Always look on the bright side of life